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Deconstruction Roundup for December 28th, 2018

(by the Slacktiverse and others; collected by Silver Adept, who has had a pleasant set of holidays.)

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  1. To let people stay up to date on ongoing deconstructions. (All ones on our list, including finished and stalled ones, here.)
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Fred Clark: Slacktivist

Froborr: Jen A. Blue

RubyTea: Heathen Critique

Silver Adept: Here on The Slacktiverse

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Dragon’s Fire: Achievements In Diplomacy

We’re still in Chapter Four, which a prodigiously long chapter, even by Pernese standards. Last time, we had to confront the reality that watch-whers also have mating flights, and their urges are apparently equally as wide-band broadcast as the dragons are. Which meant that Pellar ended up with Alessa’s daughter, Arella, and with her, managed to broker the scenarios by which the watch-wher camp would be able to care for itself and have the eggs get scattered to people that will take care of them.

Dragon’s Fire: Book One: Chapter 4, Part Two: Content Notes: Sexist assumptions, “Nice Guy” sexism

After agreeing to be the Harper for the camp, Pellar sets out to carve himself a drum so that he can communicate with the Harper network. Arella takes an interest in his work, and in him, while Jaythen seems to only grow colder toward him. Pellar desperately hopes for a wherry to fly into one of his traps (and here he says that “wherhide” would be an excellent drumhead, so I guess that’s talking about wherries rather than watch-whers), but what he gets instead is a fight to the death with a wildboar, where Pellar’s knife and Jaythen’s arrows do their best to kill it without suffering too much injury themselves. They do, and Pellar claims the hide for his drum. Jaythen warms up to Pellar after their shared defense, and Arella, in preparing the hide and the meat, makes sure to splash plenty of blood on Pellar, so that she can drag him off to the bathing caves. She’s got something in mind, but Pellar begs off because of his injuries from fighting the boar.

After that, Aleesa gets her first lesson in reading after asking Pellar when he’s going to start arranging for the delivery of the promised year’s supplies.

“You know I can’t read,” Aleesa told him curtly, sliding the slate toward Arella. Pellar grabbed her hand, caught her eyes, and shook his head slightly. Gently, he pulled the slate back and carefully drew three small ovals piled on top of each other. He slid the slate back to Aleesa and gave her a challenging look.
“Eggs?” Aleesa said, glancing at the drawing. Then she glanced up at the letters above. “That says eggs?”
[…Pellar demonstrates the singular form, so as to explain one of the purposes of the letter s…]
“You want me to write the letter?” Aleesa asked. Pellar nodded. Aleesa frowned, then bent over the slate, carefully sliding the chalk on the slate. She muttered to herself as she drew and finally looked up, holding the slate toward Pellar with a sour look.
“Mine doesn’t look as good as yours,” Aleesa said.
Pellar held up one finger.
“You’re saying that it’s my first?”
Pellar nodded.
Aleesa pursed her lips, but Pellar’s face burst into a smile as he danced his finger up and down in front of her and cocked his head invitingly. He held up two fingers, then three, four, and finally five.
“You want me to try five more times?”
Pellar nodded.
Aleesa’s lips thinned rebelliously, and Arella smiled at her and mimicked, ” ‘Five times to learn, Arella.’ “

It’s unorthodox, but it works, and Aleesa picks it up so well that in ten weeks, she can read sentences off of Pellar’s slate just fine. And there’s a plan – Pellar is going to go out away from the camp and drum a message about trading watch-wher eggs. He’s leaving because Jaythen said if there’s something of value to trade, there’s something of value for the Shunned to steal.

We note the narrative isn’t helping if it wants to portray at least some of the Shunned as sympathetic, a thing that comes back to bite the narrative in the ass almost immediately. Arella, apparently, has fallen in love with Pellar, even though it was only supposedly for the mating flight, and she’s not happy that Pellar is going through with this plan.

Pellar tells Aleesa why he’s not settling down – he’s Shunned, as best he can tell, because his parents were. (But he’s special because he was adopted by the Harpers.). What he tells Arella, though, is that he’s not in love with her. She tells him in reply that as soon as this plan is done, she’s leaving to find her fortune in the world, since it’s not going to be with him. He presents her with a small drum that she can use to call him for an emergency, and the two share a kiss. “Not the kiss of lovers, but the kiss of friends who once had been.” As breakups go, by Pernese standards, this is downright wonderful.

Also, it’s worth mentioning how the drum presentation happens. Arella and Pellar have broken up, and Pellar wants to present the gift to her, but he’s been hiding it in his bedchamber. Arella, seeing where they’re going, is initially rather resistant to the idea of heading there — they’ve just broken up and now he wants some benefits to their friendship? Nuh-uh. Pellar “waved aside her objections with a hand and begged her with his eyes to wait.” And Arella does, suspiciously, according to the narrative.

Not three paragraphs later, Pellar uses his slate to tell her about the drum. This could be someone forgetting what they are writing, and/or background sexism on display, but I think it’s ultimately going to end up as a foreshadowing event and is supposed to give us insight into Pellar’s character. Pellar has the means to communicate with Arella, but he doesn’t use it to stop the misunderstanding once it starts, and instead leans on their shared past to get Arella to trust him long enough to prove his intentions were good. He seems to understand why Arella has a problem, but he dismisses it because he knows that he’s not going to try anything with her, and so that’s not important. This attitude is going to bite him in the ass in a big way in the next chapter, and I can’t quite figure out how it’s survived in the atmosphere of mistrust he’s been in, and also he lives on a world where dragon-kin can basically override human emotions and desires with their own. There’s obviously protocols in place, at least here at the camp, about consent and what it means to have your body overridden, and yet we still have this instance where Pellar dismisses a valid complaint without actually trying to resolve it or see it for more than a second from Arella’s perspective. (Lack of consent has always been a consistent theme in Pern, but here it sticks out pretty sorely.)

Plot-wise, after giving Arella her drum, Pellar sets out, hits his drum message to Zist, sends Chitter with a longer explanation, and then seeds his tale among the people he thinks will be most responsive to the idea of trading for an egg, even at the steep cost the chance comes with. He’s eventually intercepted by D’vin, sent by Zist to assist Pellar on his mission, and Hurth, his dragon, tells Pellar that he has a lovely voice to talk to both dragons and fire-lizards with and compliments him on his imagery for coordinates.

Pellar also receives a suit of clothes denoting his status as a full official apprentice Harper, which delights Pellar, because

Even though Master Murenny and Zist had said he could be an apprentice, he had always been half-afraid far they didn’t mean it, that maybe they were just humoring him–until now. Proper clothes! He really was a harper!

I have several is to say about this, and most of them would be beeped on network television, so, instead…

Pellar has been doing things that risk his life for Zist and Murenny, and they haven’t accepted him on as one of their own formally yet? What kind of terrible people and parents are they?

Pellar gets changed into his new clothing.

He was surprised to notice that his trousers and tunic both contained several large pockets–not standard.
D’vin, alerted by Hurth, turned and told him, “Master Murenny told me you’d wonder about the pockets. He said to tell you that he expects you to carry more burdens than most.”
Pellar looked surprised.
“He also said that he was sure you’d be up to them,” the dragonrider added. “From the little I’ve seen of you, I’d say he underestimates you.”

Or, perhaps, someone realized that carrying a writing implement and slate around all the time means you need more storage space to put out all in. But this will also probably have some sort of plot requirement later.

Popping over to Camp Natalon, Hurst needs a place to land out of sight and wonders why Pellar wasn’t Searched to be a dragonrider. When Pellar points out the need to talk, Hurst reminds him that he can hear Pellar just fine, the implication being that a dragon would be more than adequate for communication between a rider that can’t talk and everyone else who needs to hear them. I like that the dragon has considered this, at least, and that we’re continuing to be in dialogue about how telepathic bonds to dragon-family creatures could make a person with a disability able to function just fine in the society around them. Not that such things will happen, because the supply of such things is tightly controlled, but that it could.

The place where Hurth can land is the graveyard from before, and Heh wonders why Pellar has such a concern about small mounds of dirt. His mind provides the answer, and Hurth provides some insight.

Dragons go between to die, Hurth responded. He sounded sad and somewhat confused. I suppose earth is like going between for people.
Pellar was startled by the comparison and stunned by Hurth’s astute observation.

The dragons always understand more than they let on, and especially as the books continue. Hurth is right, in his own way.

Zist charges Pellar with funding a way to get Alessa to accept protection from dragonriders when the Shunned arrive to try and steal from her, and Pellar suggests Telgar as the Weyr to ask to take them there (first, at least.) Then it’s the end of chapter 4, and Pellar is on his way back to Alessa’s camp, having given the plan and secured the promise of a Harper for the camp as well, so that Pellar can continue on his journey doing something else instead of being at the wherhandler camp.

Deconstruction Roundup for December 21st, 2018

(by the Slacktiverse and others; collected by Silver Adept, who is hoping for a really nice work to come their way.)

The point of these posts is threefold:

  1. To let people stay up to date on ongoing deconstructions. (All ones on our list, including finished and stalled ones, here.)
  2. To let people who can’t comment elsewhere have a place to comment.
  3. To let people comment in a place where people who can’t read Disqus can see what they have to say.

Ana Mardoll: Ana Mardoll’s Ramblings

Elizabeth Sandifer: Eruditorium Press

Fred Clark: Slacktivist

Froborr: Jen A. Blue

RubyTea: Heathen Critique

Silver Adept: Here on The Slacktiverse

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Dragon’s Fire: Sidelined

Last chapter, Pellar went to try and find the camp where the Shunned are, so he could learn more about the people stealing coal from Camp Natalon. Along the way, he watched a young girl get caught in a snare, and then threatened with sexual assault as repayment for the “favor” Tenim had done her of getting her down by using his bird to cut the rope.

Dragon’s Fire, Book 1, Chapter 4: Content Notes: Children required to fight, ablism (mental health variety), underage non-consensual sex

Camp Natalon, 493.4, and this:

Fire-lizard dance on wing
To the raucous song I sing.
Fire-lizard wheel and turn
Show me how the dragons learn.

The narrative first shows is how Chitter gets Zist to find and bring Pellar in after he’s been choked out, Tenim presumably having to leave from the presence of Zist or Chitter before he can finish the job. Zist has significant rage about the idea that Pellar might have been killed, and Kindan returns, screaming “Fire!” from the blocked chimney right after Zist gets Pellar settled.

The narrative spends time with Pellar as he recovers, but much of it is with him asleep, so we only get the highlights of the piper at the festivities, and the birth of Nuella and Dalor’s sister, and the trader caravan that was supposed to have a wher apprentice but doesn’t (Pellar speculates Tenim scared him off, or that Moran did, but Zist isn’t really ready to entertain the idea that the two of them are working together), and then Pellar goes for a walk, sees Cristov, and follows him after Cristov visits Kaylek’s grave. He’s not quiet enough to be unnoticed, though, and Cristov and Pellar manage to have a conversion about recent events together as they keep watch on the chimney to see if someone else will try again. Cristov is fascinated by Chitter, and mentions that Tarik thinks fire-lizards will be more useful in the mines than watch-whers will, and is working on getting another egg (the first one apparently disappeared after being frightened by Dask) so that he can train the lizard inside. Eventually, Cristov heads off, promising to keep Pellar a secret.

The narrative is humanizing Tarik a bit here. He’s not wrong that fire-lizards will be useful in the mines, if properly trained. And if they can also detect bad air, they’ll be much more portable than the watch-wher, and possibly better free to communicate, as well.

Zist dresses Pellar down the next morning for leaving without permission and giving Zist a fright. And also for being caught and falling asleep on his watch. And also takes care to ascribe different motives to why Tarik hates watch-whers (scaring the fire-lizard and being awake when he’s embezzling) and suggesting that Tarik’s stolen coal might be getting traded for a fire-lizard egg. At the suggestion that perhaps someone should go find a watch-wher egg for the camp, Pellar gets sent off with the Traders to do exactly that, helping patch the road on the way to the camp, and then eventually telling Pellar to find Aleesa when he reveals what he’s looking for.

Which takes Pellar three months to do, one to research and two to find, and there:’s a story of travelogue part of the story here, where Pellar goes various places, traveling with either the traders or the Shunned, whom he finds mostly alike, except for the status that separates them. Having a fire-lizard is a benefit in his favor for finding groups to travel with. And, by exposure, he stops being afraid of them because they stop being stories and start being people again. The narrative isn’t quite willing to go far enough to make the Shunned a group of unfairly maligned people, though.

Still, with the Shunned, Pellar found himself called upon more often to prove himself, either by providing for the communal pot, prescribing the sick, or, more often than he liked, proving his strength.
His fights were always with those near his own age who looked upon him as an easy challenge and a good way to improve their standing in the community. After painfully losing his first several encounters, Pellar got quite adept at seeking quick solutions and less concerned about any bruises he gave his assailants.
Even though food was not plentiful and he was expected to share, Pellar thrived, filling out and growing tall. So tall, in fact, that as time progressed he found himself challenged by older, taller lads, many Turns older than his own Thirteen.

Cocowhat by depizan

I can’t quite wrap my head around this idea. Pellar can hunt, trap, forage, and bring in game, and having a fire-lizard is seen as a good thing, but more often than not, for the Shunned, he has to fight his way in to acceptance of the community? As a child of not actually thirteen? Exactly what kind of purpose does this serve? Are we supposed to be thinking of the Shunned as analogous to street gangs, where Pellar has to be initiated each time by fighting? And again, these are children fighting. I don’t know many adults who we would think of as responsible condoning the idea of someone needing to get or give hurt to someone so that they can be part of the group. Admittedly, many stories that I have been told (by those more in the know about being, essentially, homeless as a child) talk about fighting for what’s yours from a horde of others also trying to get ahead for themselves, but that’s essentially working on the idea that there’s nobody who is actually banding together to better themselves, or making temporary alliances to make things better for their group against other groups. It’s Rand’s almighty individualism triumphing again, perhaps, even in a situation where it really shouldn’t, and where it really isn’t, given that every time we’ve encountered the Shunned, they’re traveling in a group, instead of each individually. It just seems like the narrative can’t conceive of the idea that perhaps the people who see the Shunned as street gangs and thugs could be wrong about that, and that the truly terrible people, like Tenim, are a small terrifying minority of the group. It can’t even get to the halfway position that a lot of people in the States have about how some people are the “deserving poor” (i.e. they look like us and they willingly abase themselves and tell lies about how terrible they are so that we can feel superior to them) and some people deserve to be poor (because they don’t look like us, they ask us to confront the terrible truths of how complicit we are in their situation, and they don’t give a damn about looking pathetic in front of us to feed our sense of superiority).

If the narrative could show us that the perceptions of the Holders and Harpers and others about the Shunned are wrong, it would make for better narrative tension. They started to do it with Zist, but they haven’t stuck with it, and instead we get these groups of Shunned that think it’s an entirely acceptable initiation ritual to have their own children fight this strange child that wants to travel with them until someone gives up. Even if they’re not the ones arranging the fights, it’s strange to me that they would allow them to continue, willingly sacrificing resources or a working body or something else so that someone can get their jollies pounding on the new guy. People are strange, I understand, and so it’s realistic in that regard, but it doesn’t seem to have a narrative point, other than “the Shunned might look civilized, but they’re not.” (And we can re-paste the blisteringly angry rant from a few chapters ago about that here, since it keeps coming up.)

Pellar gets sent on what ends up being a lead that takes him more a month’s travel in the wrong direction, only to find a fragment that suggests he should go back the direction he came from, and then strike out in a new direction, in a place that is definitely well away from the holds, Holds, and halls. He’s about to give up on finding the right space, until Pellar remembers that whers fly at night (which is a rather bold conclusion based on seeing it happen exactly once), beds down early, and then sends Chitter to follow the flying watch-wher that happens to conveniently just barely appear within his sight in the middle of the night. Chitter leads him to the camp of the Whermaster.

Pellar hadn’t known what sort of reaction to expect, but he didn’t count on having an arrow whiz toward him to strike the ground just in front of his foot.
“That’s far enough!” a voice in the distance shouted in warning. “State your business.”
[…Pellar’s not exactly equipped to handle that request, but uses gestures to indicate his lack of ability to speak…]
“Maybe we shouldn’t take any chances,” the man replied. “If he’s one of the Shunned and he reports back–”
Pellar’s eyes widened. They were talking about killing him.

Hang on, why is that important? Up to this point, the Shunned have been portrayed as brutish thugs not too much more concerned with anything above mob violence. Are we supposed to assume the Shunned would kill any remaining whers and their handlers for food, and that’s the important part to think about?

As things are, Pellar gets into the camp, after Jaythen, the guard, trips Pellar and thumps him soundly on his back to test whether or not he really can’t talk. Aleesa believes him then, but it broke the slate that Pellar uses to communicate. Alessa apparently has plenty, though, so that’s less of an issue. We also find out that Pellar has a nickname and a reputation — “The Silent Harper” — and that the traders at least have been telling stories about him and his tracking abilities. After a demonstration of his manners that has Aleesa laughing about the fact that he has them, Pellar is led into the camp, and we learn the real reason why everyone in her camp is so on edge about being discovered.

“You found our old camp over by Campbell’s Field?”
Pellar shook his head, his surprise obvious.
“I told Jaythen no one would find it,” she [Aleesa] said with a bitter laugh. Her look turned sour. “Except maybe the dragonriders.”
Pellar carefully schooled his expression to be neutral but he didn’t fool the old woman.
“They don’t like us,” Aleesa continued bitterly. “They say that watch-whers steal food meant for their dragons.” She snorted in disgust. “That D’gan! Him with his high airs. He got it in his mind that the watch-whers ate him out of Igen Weyr.”
Pellar looked surprised. He knew that D’gan was the Weyrleader of Telgar Weyr, and that Igen Weyr had been combined with Telgar a number of Turns back, but he hadn’t heard anything about watch-whers being involved.
“He says they are abominations and shouldn’t exist,” Aleesa said with a sniff. She looked at Pellar. “I know they’re no beauties on the outside, but they’ve hearts of gold when you get to know them. Hearts of gold.” Her eyes turned involuntarily toward the entrance to the cave and the crevice beyond.
“And there are so few left,” she added softly.
“So few,” she repeated, nodding to herself, her gaze turned inward. After a moment, she glanced back up at Pellar and told him conspiratorially, “I think she’s the last one, you know.”
Then her tone changed abruptly and she demanded, “”So what do you want and why should I let you live?”
It was then that Pellar realized the Whermaster as quite insane.

Casual ablism is not a good look on anyone, but also, I have reason to doubt the factual claim itself that Aleesa is insane. She may be factually wrong about having the last watch-wher on the planet, but she might also be right if her watch-wher is the only breeding one on the planet. And also, she still doesn’t trust Pellar enough to believe that he’s not going to bring D’gan down on their heads. Because that asshole has already been established as the kind of person who would call a watch-wher an abomination and demand they be driven from “his” lands. And that kind of persecution might make someone react very differently to outside people coming into their camp, no matter what their stated reasons are. Pellar figures this out almost immediately, although the narrative shades his thoughts to continue with this idea that Aleesa and her crew are not mentally competent. This, for example, is the paragraph immediately following where we broke the quote.

In the course of the next few days, Pellar discovered that Aleesa’s camp was a desperate place full of desperate people. It took all of Pellar’s tact, winsome ways, and hard work to earn their grudging acceptance–and his continued existence. For, unlike the Shunned, these people were not only desperate, they were fanatics dedicated to the continued existence of the watch-whers.

That still doesn’t qualify them as insane, although we’re supposed to believe that the fanaticism, in addition to the continued threat of death for Pellar, is proof that they’re all crazy there. Cultish, you could probably go for, and that does present possible issues about believing someone else’s reality over the consensus, but there’s still nothing necessarily insane about that when you take into account their circumstances and the fact that they’re essentially existing on hostile ground, and possibly with one of the few remaining watch-whers in existence.

Plus, Aleesa has a perfectly good reason to detest the dragonriders and anyone who might be working with them.

“Dragonriders care nothing for us,” Aleesa continued in a bitter voice. “It was D’gan himself, Weyrleader of Telgar, who sent us packing from our last camp.”
” ‘Your beasts will eat all the herdbeasts and leave nothing for the fighting dragons,’ ” she quoted. She shook her head, her eyes shining bright with unshed tears.
“Fighting dragons!” she snorted. “No Thread has fallen any time in over a hundred Turns! What do they fight?” She shook her head dolefully.
“And he turfed us out, just like that, like we were Shunned.” She sniffed. “One of the babies died on the way here, for want of food.” She shook her head again. “Anything the watch-whers ate, they earned. They kept watch at night for nightbeasts eager to devour the herds, they caught and killed tunnel snakes, frightened away wherries–even the herders were glad to have us–but he sent us packing.
“No,” she said, looking at Pellar, “I’ll hear nothing of dragonriders in my camp. They sent us out to die, and the last queen watch-wher with us.”
The look of shock on Pellar’s face was so obvious that Aleesa, when she saw it, gave him a sour laugh. “You think all dragonriders are perfect and can do no harm?” She shook her head derisively. “You have a lot to learn, little one, a lot to learn.”

This is another one of those things that I like about the new author’s influence. Both of these books so far have been willing to go and talk about the things that have to exist in the world that’s been built, but have been ignored or actively quashed by the people in power, and the narrative with them, since it was portraying them as the heroes and commoners as usurpers against the preordained way that had been established. We’ve been reading the accounts of the lords and the generals and the merchants and propagandists, and now we’ve finally decided to try and treat the things that happen to the commoners seriously enough to give them time and space to show where the flaws and the violence is that goes into propping up the system as it currently exists. I can’t imagine this kind of text happening with the original author solely at the helm, not ever. Because the dragonriders were perfect and could do no harm, at least so long as they were aligned with Benden and their Weyrleaders’ vision of what the future and the society should be.

We saw how D’gan treated those in Camp Natalon, and now we know about a certain amount of extra distaste he would have had for being asked to convey someone to get a watch-wher egg. And a reason why he would have refused outright, even in the face of charm and people asking nicely. The narrative continues with Pellar, having drawn a watch, recalling conversations that he had with herders and others who were quite grateful for the watch-whers, but would only say so after Pellar had convinced them he wasn’t working with D’gan. The narrative also then points out that Pellar had already formed an opinion of D’gan based on how much of a sore winner he was with repeated victories at the All-Weyr Games. This suggests that Pellar’s surprise wasn’t that someone disrespecting D’gan, but that he had never heard anyone be so brazen about it, which seems to have been Piemur’s problem, if I recall correctly — a willingness to speak open defiance in closed and friendly quarters that everyone else thought might lead to him acting on that same idea and getting himself killed.

As things go, Pellar gets bumped from behind by the queen wher, who wants him to move so that she can get out. Chitter provides the necessary interface, and the wher queen looks at him and nods when he thinks his you’re welcome to her after moving, but of course, we already knew that whers could understand thoughts from Kindan and Nuella’s experimentation. What Pellar doesn’t understand is when the second wher comes barreling out after the queen, but Aleesa is there to explain immediately — it’s a mating flight for the whers.

Aaand… there’s some quoting to do here, but I should mention before we get into this section that given what we know about mating flights right now, I should probably warn for discussions of underage sex while under the influence of watch-wher emotions, in case this is a section you want to skip.


“Have you ever seen a mating flight?” Aleesa asked, her voice filled with a reverence that made Pellar uneasy.
Pellar shook his head.
“Have you ever felt a mating flight?” Aleesa asked with a hint of a leer in her voice.
Reluctantly Pellar nodded.
[…mating flights are common enough in this camp that there’s a procedure in place…]
He found Polla, one of the older women, already organizing the children into groups. He was surprised to see some of the younger women eyeing him consideringly.
“It would only be for the duration of the flight,” the woman said when she caught his gaze. “Nothing more than that.”
Pellar nodded, not sure of his own feelings, and wondered how many of the children were the results of previous mating flights–he’d heard enough about them during his time at the Harper Hall.
[…more logistics get discussed…]
“How many Turns have you, anyway?” Polla asked, regarding Pellar carefully.
Pellar hastily pulled out his slate and wrote 13.
Polla read it and laughed, nodding toward the younger woman. “Arella’s near your age, she’s only three Turns older.”
Pellar found it hard to believe that the other woman had only sixteen Turns; he would have guessed her nearer to thirty. Life with the watch-whers was clearly very demanding.
“Come sit by me, then,” Arella called, patting a spot near her.
Pellar crossed around the fire and had just sat, nervously, when the watch-whers mated.
Much later, Arella whispered in his ear, “Now you are one of us.”

Small mercies, I suppose, that we’re not subjected to the details of the actual act happening while Pellar, at 13, is going through with sex while not under the control of his own body. And that he’s not looking around and describing what’s going on around, either, as there’s the distinct possibility that children even younger than he is might be doing the same. There’s never been any sort of narrative insistence anywhere that, say, prepubescent children don’t have their wills and emotions overpowered because they don’t understand what’s going on enough to be struck with the desire to mate when the dragons, whers, or fire-lizards are engaged in the mating process.

Just an understanding that, because of the circumstances, and the lack of consent, nothing permanent happens while under the influence of the mating flight. And also that people’s vows of fidelity aren’t broken if one or the other ends up in a mating flight situation. That’s one of the bright spots of this entire setup — because it happens often enough in the world, the people who experience it on the regular are well-equipped to understand what’s going to happen, and can help walk someone who is inexperienced through the entire thing. In terms of who Pellar could have been with for a respectful and effective first time, this qualifies pretty well. The explanations given so that Pellar isn’t thrust into this situation unaware and the fact that everyone understands that mating flights aren’t conscious decisions are the bright spots in this otherwise dim section.

People might argue in this mostly-medieval world, that thirteen is not actually underage, and that young children in that world were being married and expected to act as adults in society, as the period we now know as “adolescence” didn’t exist and wasn’t on the radar. I’m guessing the authors are taking this particular attitude as justification to why their thirteen year-old character and a sixteen year-old character are having mating-influenced sex. And that’s still assuming that Pellar and Arella are only having sex with each other for the entirety of the mating flight’s influence. Which is not at all necessarily true, given the way that the one flight we saw in a Weyr looked like it was going to be an orgy of everyone with everyone.

I don’t even know if Pellar has been given any sort of useful sex ed. It’s possible, given that he’s heard about mating flights in the Harper Hall, but…yeah. There’s a good chance this is his first time, and he doesn’t even get the benefit of consenting to it. This is one of the more disturbing aspects of Pern, every time it comes up and we realize that it’s not just the dragons who can do it, but the fire lizards can influence their own, and now we know the watch-whers can, too. Which means it has to be rough being a person on Pern, when just about any of the dragon life could fill your mind with a singular desire for sex with anyone around if they got close enough to you while they were in heat. (And “close” isn’t defined, either. Even if the flight path is supposed to head away from dense populations, there’s always the possibility that “close” is approximately the range of an ICBM’s warhead. Or the amount of distance that it can cover before delivering that warhead.) That has to be especially rough for the women of Pern, because, as Pellar notes, that much unprotected sex is bound to result in pregnancies a nonzero amount of the time, and without birth control that doesn’t involve having to know a dragonrider long enough for them to take you on a short jaunt through hyperspace or more effective means of safely birthing children, there’s probably a lot of women that end up dying from the child they were impregnated with during mating flight sex. Some of them can’t be all that old when this happens to them.

And I’d be surprised if either author has thought through this idea all the way to these terrible conclusions. And if they did, and decided to go through with it, that’s monstrous. Especially since we’re well into the 2000s, with the gigantic scare that was the (grudging) acknowledgement of HIV/AIDS and the ways that it could be contracted and what it would do to those infected with it not all that far in the cultural memory. (Although still significantly in denial about it, I suppose.)

Pern continues to surprise me with the ways in which it can find to horrify its readers when they go back to it with more maturity and knowledge of just what was going on. It’s not just a single Cocowhat that I can use to point at a single horrifying piece, it’s…like finding out the world you are standing in is suddenly chock-full of Cocowhat trees, and you can see Cocowhats in every direction, everywhere, and you eventually find out, as you gaze from orbit, that the entire world itself is a giant Cocowhat upon which the Cocowhat trees grow, each with their own Cocowhat harvests. I don’t know how that will affect the count, but I’m sure some useful maths will give us what the approximate number of Cocowhats would be if it were a Pern-sized forest of Cocowhat trees.


Okay, we’re done with the underage sex talk. Regular plot recommencing.

What follows afterward is Pellar still not being accepted into the community, but he bargains his way in by promising to be their Harper, that Aleesa is illiterate, and Pellar, Polla, Jaythen, and Arella (who turns out to be (one of?) Aleesa’s daughters) hammer out together the circumstances by which others will get a chance at getting a watch-wher egg, which explains why the “year’s worth of coal’ price happens to Kindan – the price of a chance at the egg is set at a year’s worth of whatever the group that wants the chance produces. Jaythen also glints his eyes a bit at the prospect of charging gold, which is apparently there and more valuable than marks. (We’re presumably talking about nuggets rather than coins, because I’m pretty sure it’s long-established that mark pieces are made of wood.)

So, at this point, with the terms ready, and Pellar set to take on the role of educating everyone in the Harper way, including having to fashion himself some instruments to teach music with, and part of the bargain also that Pellar has to arrange for his own successor if he ever wants to leave the position permanently, I’m going to stop, because we’re about halfway through this monster of a chapter, and there’s more to be done to arrange the events of the book that we’ve already seen, although from some other perspective.

Deconstruction Roundup for December 14th, 2018

(by the Slacktiverse and others; collected by Silver Adept, who may have to think about how much effort goes into change soon.)

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Ana Mardoll: Ana Mardoll’s Ramblings

Elizabeth Sandifer: Eruditorium Press

Fred Clark: Slacktivist

Froborr: Jen A. Blue

RubyTea: Heathen Critique

Silver Adept: Here on The Slacktiverse

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Dragon’s Fire: World Tour

Last time, we got to see a very small smidgen of the untouchable class known as the Shunned, through the lens and perspective of someone incredibly privileged and trying to find out, in genuine concern, how conditions are for them. This did not result in any sort of calls for the entire system to be dismantled, but it did result in the fridging of Zist’s wife and infant daughter to the plague that was running rampant through the Shunned group they encountered. So now, Zist and his mute adopted son, Pellar, are on their way to Camp Natalon, where they will start with the events of the first book. Pellar, of course, won’t be going into the camp, but instead doing what he does best camping on the outside.

Dragon’s Fire: Book One: Chapters 2 and 3: Content Notes: Ablism, child abuse, threats of child sexual abuse

This chapter starts at Crom Hold, 492.4, for the All-Weyr Games, and provides us a further snippet of the song started in Chapter 1:

Flame on high,
Thread will die.
Flame too low,
Burrows woe.

Before we get into the action, might I note that the existence of the “All-Weyr Games” sounds like something that should have carried through all the way to the Ninth, or been temporarily suspended when there was only one weyr to have, because it seems like a much more fruitful way of causing accidents among riders than the “training exercises” mentioned in earlier books. Like how it eventually turned out that Larth got lost – demonstrations and horsing around rather than drill accidents. Also, that piece by itself has some rather interesting implications for the ways that Weyrs don’t really like talking to each other or working with each other in later chronologies.

The chapter begins with Cristov, Tarik’s son, although much younger than in the previous book, trying to help his friend, Jamal, get to a viewing space fairly quickly. The delay is because Jamal is on crutches, having broken his leg not too long ago. After a certain amount of trying to offer help (which Jamal wisely refuses as hlep due to Cristov suggesting things like he could carry Jamal), Tarik beckons Cristov, and Jamal disappears into the crowd before Cristov can show off that he’s made a friend to Tarik. Tarik demonstrates why this would have been counterproductive.

“Never mind him,” Tarik growled impatiently. “You’ll make new friends up at the Camp, you needn’t worry about that cripple.”
“He’ll be fine when the cast’s off,” Cristov protested. For all the ten Turns that Cristov had lived, his father had found fault with anyone that Cristov had tried to befriend.
“That’s neither here nor there,” Tarik grunted. “He’s a cripple now and I’m glad you won’t be around him.” He snaked a hand around Cristov and pulled him tight against him.
“This is Harper Moran,” Tarik said, gesturing to the man in blue beside him. Cristov nodded politely to the harper.

I realize that Tarik is a Designated Villain, but he’s doing his level best to be a stereotype of an abuser to everyone he knows, including his family. If he’s like this, then I have to wonder how in the first place he was accepted to Camp Natalon. There isn’t any sort of redeeming anything about him that makes it likely that he would be accepted anywhere. We don’t have to lay it on this thickly to convince the audience that he’s a villain, really.

Utterly unrelated to Tarik the abuser, what’s Zist’s supposedly lost apprentice doing here? He supposedly was going to live among the Shunned, he got lost, and we’re supposed to believe that he pops back up nine Turns later and nobody seems interested at all that he’s alive and well and spectating at the All-Weyr Games? What happened in the interim?

Additionally, according to Moran, Igen Weyr’s been abandoned recently, due to a drought in their area and the death of the last queen dragon, so the new Weyrleader of Telgar is the old Weyrleader of Igen. There seems to be a bit of a running theme in these books of people ending up in positions of power after they’ve had an issue running their own spaces.

Tarik continues to hold the Villain Ball, the Asshole Ball, and the Fool Ball together as tightly as he can. When Moran mentions firestone, Cristov asks if it’s a type of coal, on the reasoning that:

    Dragons need a mineral to produce fire

  • The coal of this region is boasted as the hottest burning coal in the world
  • Therefore, it makes sense that dragon fire is produced by coal burning.

Tarik restrains himself from beating his child for his ignorance, but Moran compliments his logic and thinking skills as suitable for a Harper. At which point, Tarik says that Cristov’s not going to be a Harper. Moran is ready for that argument as well.

“I imagine thinking will be important for miners, Tarik,” Moran said, shaking his head in disagreement. “Times are changing. The old mines have played out; the new seams are all deep underground. Mining down there will require new ways of thinking.”
“Not for me,” Tarik disagreed. “I know all I need to know about mining. I’ve been a miner for twenty Turns now–learned from my father and he’d been a miner for thirty Turns. It was his father that first opened our seam, seventy Turns back.”

TRADITIOOOON, TRADITION!

(Tentacles!)

And here I thought I wasn’t going to get an opportunity to use that again.

But also, if this is past the point in which Tarik has already lost his own mine and is headed to Natalon’s, then he’s been empirically proven wrong about knowing everything he needs to.

There’s also some nice weaving-in of the backstory, using the demonstrations of the dragons as food for thought about Thread and the upcoming reality that the real thing will be falling soon. (And a lot of infodumping, too, but there’s at least some skill on display in making the infodump seem natural, before doing a small bit of the prologue that we had from the last book about the need for good steel, and it mentions that Natalon invited Tarik to his camp when he heard Tarik was looking for work.

Then we’re introduced to Tenim, who is attempting a crash-into-pickpocket attempt on a wealthy trader. Tenim manages to get the purse, but the Trader pats himself down fairly soon after getting up, and Tenim has to turn his act of thievery into an act of heroism, as if he were picking the purse up to give it back. This works, and Tenim gets a half-mark piece for his “honesty.” But it’s apparently not enough.

Out of sight, Tenim allowed himself one long, explosive curse. His belly rumbled in agreement.
No matter what Moran said, he was too old to beg. It was time to steal.
In the evening there was gambling; Tenim decided to risk his half-mark on the chance for more.
If he didn’t, there were always those too deep in their cups to notice his light fingers late at night.

And again with the connections to Moran. Who might or might not know about the thievery of this person. The narrative switches to Moran, who is working a crowd of gamblers, several of whom he suspects are allies trying to take advantage of him.

Privately, the harper was pretty certain that only half of the current crowd was working with Berrin, the rest being innocent but greedy gamblers hoping to exploit Berrin and the harper. Moran was quite certain that in the end he would take money from both groups and come out ahead. He had no qualms with that–there were hungry children at their camp who wouldn’t question how their bellies came to be full.

There’s a quick cut to Jamal (with the broken leg) and his sister, Halla, where Halla remarks that Jamal’s leg is beginning to smell and suggests a healer. Jamal says, “Healers won’t see us, you know that,” and then goes off again after telling Halla she’s supposed to be looking after the other children. She’s eight, by the way. Which is depressingly common in fantasy kingdoms and large families alike. That smell is, I suspect, is a very bad thing for Jamal, and that he can’t access health care tells me he’s probably the child of Shunned parents, and here we are in a world where even though they’re not marked themselves, the children of the Shunned are pretty clearly expected to just die along with their parents, problem solved. It seems like the new author has managed to convince the older one that looking through the lenses of the commoners is worthwhile for storytelling, and is doing their best to try and shine light on what was, until now, just implication or something beneath the nobility.

The chapter ends with the results of Moran’s betting. As expected, he cleaned house sufficiently that he’s willing to redistribute some quarter-marks to his marks so that the gamblers feel like he’s being fair, before returning to…Tarik…and they talk cryptic business.

“You’ve some marks for me, I believe?”
“Indeed I do,” Moran declared jovially, handing over a two-mark piece that he’d just won as part of his other wagers. He leaned closer to Tarik and said in a softer voice, “And I hope you’ll find our other arrangement as advantageous.”
Tarik’s face hardened for just a moment before he responded, “I’m sure I will. Indeed, I’m sure of it.”

Well, I’m pretty sure this isn’t the first time that a Harper wagering has turned out well, and also reasonably sure this isn’t the first time a Harper has profited against those looking to get him to play a rigged game by rigging the game to his own advantage first and/or better. So, what is the arrangement between Moran and Tarik? And how many children are we talking about here, if they need a herder and several of the older ones are looking to beg or steal what they need to survive?

Maybe Chapter 3 has answers. But first, a new rhyme and a new time. Near Camp Natalon, 492.7-493.4 (so nearly a full Turn) and this:

Work and living drays do roll,
Taking every long day’s toll.
Bearing goods and bringing gifts–
Traders working every shift.

Chapter 3, instead, focuses on how Pellar got to the area around Camp Natalon and who he met. The first sign of something is Pellar noticing a suspicious spot on the ground, which turns out to be a bundle of yellow flowers…on top of “a grave, newly dug–and it was too small for an adult.” Pellar’s further investigation shows that the person who likely brought the flowers is wearing crude sandals made of bark. He can find the trail left by the cold, but Pellar notices that the child has been trying very hard to erase their tracks. He suspects the child is part of a Shunned grouping somewhere nearby. The narrative then cuts to Pellar making his report to Zist at his cottage. Which he has done by writing it all out beforehand on his slate. Pellar also remarks that there are a lot of children, and they’re being used for lookouts for another group that’s stealing coal from the mine, because they’re small and cute and not likely to arouse suspicion if they play up being lost. Zist, for his part, recounts the wedding of Silstra and Dask’s flying overhead during the ceremony, mentions the obvious tension between Tarik and Natalon, and talks about how Kaylek and Kindan aren’t necessarily getting along.

Great. At least part of this book is going to be the events of the previous book, but from a different perspective. I’d like to believe it was because the fans of the time were unhappy with the way things were going and decided to write an entire fleet of fix-it fic to take care of that, but it’s probably something much more mundane, like the realization of all the plot threads that didn’t get picked up and holes that needed patching from the last book. Or maybe they thought Nuella needed more screen time.

As it is, Pellar is finishing up with Zist when his fire lizard returns to him and says someone found his campsite. Pellar finds someone has rifled his things and left him flowers. Later on, he’ll find that the bark sandals child took his good shoelaces and left the twine they were using in exchange. He assumes the flower child is a girl, but there’s no actual confirmation of this, even as it leads Pellar into fantasy imagining about what it might be one to be that sensitive girl in a crowd of rough Shunned.

Master Zist has told him about the burned-out Shunned wagon that he’d found on his ill-fated sojourn with Cayla and Carissa, and that tale, along with so many others regarding the Shunned, left Pellar certain that at least some of them would think nothing of killing him for his belongings–or even just out of simple spite.
Pellar clenched his jaw as he thought of the little flower girl in the company of such rough men. His thoughts grew darker and he found himself thinking about Moran, Zist’s lost apprentice, imagining him tortured and worse after being unmasked by the Shunned.

There’s a certain amount of active imagination that I want to accord to still being young, but not in any sort of way that would excuse the actual contents of those thoughts, because although nobody seems to have reported this fact back to the Harpers, and they didn’t seem to have anyone else present at the Games, Moran is alive and being visible!

More disturbingly, though, Pellar is making prejudicial assumptions about the Shunned, based on the stories he heard about them (which seem very inclined to talk about how dangerous and lawless the Shunned are, propping up the not-really-proven picture Pellar is drawing on) and his assumption that there’s a sweet, innocent girl in there looking to be rescued. Neither of these assumptions has actually been borne out, nor has anyone done any sort of in-depth study about the Shunned and their reasons for doing what they are doing. We’re still careening along on the assumption that the Shunned are generally vicious people who deserve what they’ve gotten without there being any actual proof of that.

The narrative goes along with Pellar, thankfully summarizing the daily routine and his observations of the people stealing the coal at night, as well as an abbreviated version of the coal mine disaster that killed Danil, Dask, and others. Pellar notices again that flowers are adorning the graves before he encounters Nuella, who notices him, thinks of him as a threat, since he’s an outsider, and arms herself with a rock against him. She also threatens to sic Zist on the task of finding him, based on his legendary temper and tenacity. Pellar fully reports all of this, and Zist, to avoid having two apprentices (which is apparently uncommon in the Harper Hall), decides to conditionally field promote Pellar to journeyman so that he can take on Kindan. And also to tell him to go back to the Hall before the winter arrives, because Zist doesn’t want Pellar freezing to death.

Time continues to pass and we learn about how Pellar has been setting traps for meat away from the Camp’s hunting grounds until the plot-relevant kicks in and out turns out there’s a person that stepped into his animal trap.

It was a little girl, no more than nine Turns old. She was staring back at him, her brown eyes locked intently on him as she hung upside down, one foot caught in the loop of his rope snare. One hand feebly held her tunic up to protect her from the cold wind but it flopped down enough on the other side that he could see her bulging belly and bare ribs; her legs were little more than sticks.
[…Pellar observes she’s probably Shunned before hiding again because other children are coming to her…]
“Halla!” one of the younger ones called as they caught sight of her. “What are you doing up there?”
“Don’t ask silly questions,” the little girl snapped back, “just get me down.”
“I don’t know why,” the teenager repliedm”You got yourself caught, you should get yourself down.”
In that instant, Pellar decided he hated the young man. It wasn’t just his words, or his tone, it was the youth’s body language: Pellar knew that this teen would have no compunction, nor feel any guilt, about leaving the little girl stuck in the trap to die.
“Tenim, get me down,” Halla commanded, her irritation tinged with just the slightest bit of fear.

He does, eventually, after Halla’s appeal that Moran will know falls through, by using the trained hawk/falcon that he has, (calling Grief, the bird, the best tracker they have) to cut the rope holding Halla up. With Halla screaming in terror the entire time Grief is diving toward her.

She was up again in an instant, her arms in a fighting stance.
“Thanks for nothing Tenim,” she snarled, racing up to him. But she recoiled as Grief dropped again from the sky, screeching in her face.
“You owe me, Halla,” Tenim told her, a cold smile on his face. The smile changed to a leer as he added, “When the time comes, I’ll collect.”
The color drained from Halla’s face as his words registered. She regained her composure, saying, “If you’re still alive.”

I was going to make a pithy comment about how the new author seems to be following in the path of the old author that all the villains have to be irredeemably Always Evil, that sociopathy isn’t that common, to my knowledge, in most societies (but that Pern could be an exception, being Rand’s paradise), and that Pellar’s instant hate is the narrative is trying to give Pellar information and pass it off as super observation skills, but then Tenim threatened an eight year old child with rape (or something similar, since he’s leering at her) and I’m more than ready for Halla to knife him in his sleep and be done with it. Or shove him off a cliff. Or whatever intentional “accident” can befall him, and quickly.

The narrative is also essentially saying the stories about the Shunned are all true, and they are (or most of them are) the monsters they’ve been portrayed as. This is a bad idea.

Pellar, however, wants to know why Halla didn’t rat him out to Tenim, and Zist wants to be sure he heard the name Moran right, before dismissing the possibility it might be him unless they see him, despite the narrative telling us Zist came this way in the deliberate hope that he might learn more about Moran. His skepticism is not balanced by optimism. And, hearing this, Zist wants even more to send Pellar away.

Pellar prevails, and goes to scout a more accurate number and placement for the camp, but he’s almost discovered by Tarik and Tenim discussing their business agreement. Which is mostly “Tarik helps Tenim steal coal so it can be sold at a profit for Tarik.” Tarik claims he’s doing it so that Cristov can have enough money, but I tm his real reason comes out not a paragraph later.

“All I want is a place of my own and a chance to rest at the end of my days, not always slaving away for someone,” Tarik protested. “I’ve earned it. I would have had it, too, if it hadn’t been for you and the Shunned.”
“Well, you don’t have to worry about them,” Tenim said. “And I said I’d take care of you.”

The sort of thing that “socialist” programs like Social Security were created for. Or retirement accounts, if you like. Rather than having to work until you die.

I also want to know how far out this idea was planned, such that the first book in the series could be used to never directly accuse Tarik of the sabotage and problems Kindan experienced. But, on the other hand, Kindan wouldn’t have known any of this, and so he would likely have been ready to throw accusations as soon as he got something that looked like proof. So it still doesn’t work like we want it to.

The last part of the conversation Pellar hears clues is in that the Shunned are not the ones buying the coal. Which makes sense, because the Shunned presumably don’t have money to buy it with.

There’s a short interlude with Zist about Kindan and Tarik and what to do next before going back out into the cold for another overheard conversation that gives us the context of how Tarik’s mine collapsed and he has to go to Natalon’s.

“He’ll figure out that someone’s stealing coal, that’s what,” Tarik growled back.
“Only if he finds out you’ve been mining the pillars,” Tenim observed. “Otherwise he’ll think he’s only got the coal you and the shift leaders have reported mining.”
“It was easier when it was my own mine I was stealing from,” Tarik muttered darkly.

And there’s another reminder that Tarik is a greedy man, who embezzled from his own mine for his own profits. If he’s supposed to be the sympathetic victim of Tenim’s cold-blooded blackmail, the authors are failing extremely hard at it.

Also, as I recall from the first book, Kindan said that mining the pillars is a terrible idea, and one prone to causing structural instability in the place where you are mining, which is why you usually do it last when you’re closing down a mine. Or when you’re truly desperate. So Tarik is courting disaster.

“You still would be had it if it hadn’t been for the accident that collapsed the roof,” Tenim replied.
“Accidents happen,” Tarik said dismissively. “Masterminer Britell’s board of inquiry never accused me of anything.”

And that confirms that Tarik is still even more an asshole, in addition to an embezzler.

After a small threat about what “accidents” might happen to Tarik, Tenim thinks he might drop in on the festival at Natalon’s. Which turns out to be that Tenim is the one who blocks the chimney by displacing bricks with stones. Which incenses Pellar enough to tackle Tenim and try to stop him. But Tenim is a head taller and twenty kilos heavier and apparently fairly effortlessly chokes Pellar out into unconsciousness after they both take a hard fall off of one of the cliffs, and that’s the end of Chapter 3.

Pellar gets better, of course.

Deconstruction Roundup for December 7th, 2018

(by the Slacktiverse and others; collected by Silver Adept, who awaits the time in which all can be made clear and unredacted.)

The point of these posts is threefold:

  1. To let people stay up to date on ongoing deconstructions. (All ones on our list, including finished and stalled ones, here.)
  2. To let people who can’t comment elsewhere have a place to comment.
  3. To let people comment in a place where people who can’t read Disqus can see what they have to say.

Elizabeth Sandifer: Eruditorium Press

Fred Clark: Slacktivist

Froborr: Jen A. Blue

RubyTea: Heathen Critique

Silver Adept: Here on The Slacktiverse

Let us know, please, if there are errors in the post. Or if you don’t want to be included. Or if there’s someone who you think should be included, which includes you. We can use more content. Or if you are settling in to what winter weather is going to be like for this year. Or for any other reason, really.